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The Dead Girl's Lament. by thewritingthimble The Dead Girl's Lament. by thewritingthimble
This is a tanka/elegy poem with an edited image.

Awesome stock from: [link]

This is the second tanka that I have posted (a Japanese form of poetry with a 5,7,5,7,7 syllable stucture) and including everything it took around 4.5 hours to complete.

Hope you guys like it :typerhappy:

:D

P.S. please do not copy or redstribute my work without my permission-thanks! :hug:
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angelenroute Featured By Owner May 25, 2013  Professional Writer
Hi, Sean here with a requested critique from :iconwe-poets:

I tend to be scared of commenting on poetry turned into art like this, because very often the person is looking for praise, not critique. But if you are open to change, I have none for the words themselves, just the placement.

The picture is beautiful and the words great, so I'd suggest you move them down a bit and use a color that will stand out better. Right now "Snatched before" blends into the green above it, "the reaper's claim" goes into the dark area of her neck, the comma after "legacy" disappears, and "woe" crashes a bit too.

All else looks great.
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thewritingthimble Featured By Owner May 25, 2013
Thank you :) I will keep that in mind for future works :huggle:
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KirstiarnaMohan Featured By Owner May 25, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
stunning!
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thewritingthimble Featured By Owner May 25, 2013
thank you :)
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Toa-Lagara Featured By Owner May 24, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
This photo has strange, but soft colors..
Love it :3
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thewritingthimble Featured By Owner May 24, 2013
thanks :P
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Medoriko Featured By Owner May 10, 2013  Student Writer
This piece has been featured here: [link]
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thewritingthimble Featured By Owner May 11, 2013
:aww: thanks!!
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Medoriko Featured By Owner May 11, 2013  Student Writer
No problem :)
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mangasockattack Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
This is really lovely. I love your make-up! The lines are all fairly straight and the colour scheme is really nice. However, I do wish your tanaka was a little lower in the image, perhaps closer to your shoulder? The tanaka itself is well written. I also which the lines of the make-up were a little darker. Lastly, The photomanipulation on the eyes really pulls everything together, but I can see some of the green in the white of the eye, This is, again, really quite lovely and I hope this helps!
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XOXO
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